Saturday, April 14, 2012

Aura




a  million  orchids  bloom
in your eyes  - the  aura becomes
a child  who ...shall... rise



April Challenge
Haiku heights
Prompt: Aura




9 comments:

  1. Wow ~ magical ~ spiritual ~thanks, namaste, ^_^

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  2. "A million orchids bloom in your eyes" -That's lovely, very poetic.

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  3. You think well..and craft it well too..here the syllables appear to be 6-8-5...youcould consider removing the non-essential.. yesterday on the prompt of warmth.. my blogger friends and I did some experimentation and I was able to reduce the syllables to just to Seven in total.. think it over..

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    1. Yes even as i wrote it ... i became aware of the syllable thing...but also something i realised yesterday...one needs to capture the moment.......and the words that emanate from the moment.. it has an implication on the syllables but more than that it has implication on peoples hearts....I will try to remove the non essential ones...though.

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    2. And RS I ave seen your experimentation. I kinda like it.

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  4. Very beautiful...loved it so much.

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    1. hij mohinee. thanks for dropping a comment. :)

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